RESOLVED: s10e1 Problems: My major issue is just that Allura comes off as very out of character for deciding to take on the dark entity in the first place. Allura being egged on by only Lotor and Lance comes off as disingenuous. Besides that, allura just gets no fun during the entirety of s8, and this is the perfect opportunity for her to be happy for a bit!!! I’m also cutting out Shiro’s armwrestling scene; while it’s nice to see shiro so full of life, it’s been shown that Shiro has PTSD related to the times that he was in the arena. The show hasn’t addressed shiro’s PTSD since season 2, and to pretend it never existed without taking the time to prove that Shiro has overcome his trauma, it comes off as disingenous and yet another flippant disregard of Shiro’s character.
Besides that, I want to fix a lot of other, in my opinion, missed opportunities, and create a new set up to fix continued OOC behaviour Solution: Episode rewrite
The episode opens to Allura looking at the dark entity nervously, interrupted by hunk. They talk about her worries, and she’s not sure if she wants to go down to the festivities as her mood would just ruin a good time. Hank guffaws, “aw, c’mon allura! It’ll be fun, you’ll forget about everything. Besides, Lance is just going to give you those puppy dog eyes of him until you join us.” Allura laughs and agrees to go. As they leave the room, the camera zooms in on the dark entity beating against the wall. Periodically, the episode cuts back to the dark entity, at one point breaking the glass that contains it.
Allura, Hunk, Pidge, and Lance want to go together; keith insists on patrolling the area in order to make sure everything is safe. Shiro also decides to go off on his own. Before he can leave, Veronica catches Shiro watching Keith leave the group, appears behind Shiro, and gives her friend and captain a little shove. “Go on,” she urges, her eyes going to Keith. “Have fun.”
“I.. I shouldn’t. We agreed to wait until this is all over.”
With a smile, Veronica touches his arm and says, “You should know better than anyone how little time we have to live out our dreams.” With a thank you, Shiro calls after his friend.
Most of the episode is spent on Allura with the other three paladins, having fun with them, to highlight that she is having a good time. Lance trying to win a blue lion plush for her stays, but using a different game (one allura wouldn’t destroy at); and the scene with pidge and colleen stays as well. Allura and Hunk both eye the test of strength, hunk because there’s a HUGE yellow lion. He tries once and doesn’t get it; so allura offers to try, “You really think you’re up for it little lady?” mocks the carnival worker. “I suppose we won’t know until i’ve tried.” Pretending she can’t do it, “oh my, this hammer is quite heavy,” she then proceeds to whack the hell out of it, sending the bell on top right into the sky. They then walk away with hunk blushing and holding his new, massive yellow lion.
Through out the episode, there are cuts to Coran, who is still doing the Yalmor calling competition, but it’s reframed to have the same level of intensity and shadiness as the armwrestling tournament and ultimately replaces that storyline.
The scene cuts to Keith and Shiro playing darts, Keith looking intense as he’s about to throw the dart. He does, nailing a balloon that’s revealed to have one point; keith hollars in defeat and turns to shiro:” “best four out of seven!” Shiro laughs, saying they should play a different game instead.
Shiro comments that he hasn’t seen Keith relax like this in a long time, who answers in kind. “Things have been hard. We haven’t exactly had a break in over a year.” Keith pauses, thinking, before he turns with a smile to Shiro. “But you’re right. Today’s been a lot of fun. I’m glad we hung out, Shiro.” They turn to each other, smiling. Shiro’s arm reaches out, but he’s interrupted by a loud wailing that startles the both of them. “Coran?”
The penultimate scene is Coran winning the yalmor contest, receiving the cheers and celebration of the paladins (AS HE DESERVES). As the excitement dies down, Allura turns her head to the sky and pauses. Shiro, separating himself from the excitement, asks Allura if something is wrong. “...There’s something I’m worried about.”
Shiro and Allura return to the Atlas where they find the dark entity has escaped from its chamber. It breaks free from the holding room and dives toward shiro, but not reaching him before allura jumps in the way, quintessence bursting from her and she suddenly absorbs the dark entity. Shiro catches her
Additions: because i’m reformatting the energy of why allura takes on the dark entity, the mood around it is being shuffled around entirely. Allura constanting having to defend her bad decision is perhaps one of the worst offenders of allura’s personality as the season progresses from this point, and so changing the mood in which she takes on the dark entity should fix that.
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Problems: My major issue is just that Allura comes off as very out of character for deciding to take on the dark entity in the first place. Allura being egged on by only Lotor and Lance comes off as disingenuous. Besides that, allura just gets no fun during the entirety of s8, and this is the perfect opportunity for her to be happy for a bit!!!
I’m also cutting out Shiro’s armwrestling scene; while it’s nice to see shiro so full of life, it’s been shown that Shiro has PTSD related to the times that he was in the arena. The show hasn’t addressed shiro’s PTSD since season 2, and to pretend it never existed without taking the time to prove that Shiro has overcome his trauma, it comes off as disingenous and yet another flippant disregard of Shiro’s character.
Besides that, I want to fix a lot of other, in my opinion, missed opportunities, and create a new set up to fix continued OOC behaviour
Solution: Episode rewrite
The episode opens to Allura looking at the dark entity nervously, interrupted by hunk. They talk about her worries, and she’s not sure if she wants to go down to the festivities as her mood would just ruin a good time. Hank guffaws, “aw, c’mon allura! It’ll be fun, you’ll forget about everything. Besides, Lance is just going to give you those puppy dog eyes of him until you join us.” Allura laughs and agrees to go. As they leave the room, the camera zooms in on the dark entity beating against the wall. Periodically, the episode cuts back to the dark entity, at one point breaking the glass that contains it.
Allura, Hunk, Pidge, and Lance want to go together; keith insists on patrolling the area in order to make sure everything is safe. Shiro also decides to go off on his own. Before he can leave, Veronica catches Shiro watching Keith leave the group, appears behind Shiro, and gives her friend and captain a little shove. “Go on,” she urges, her eyes going to Keith. “Have fun.”
“I.. I shouldn’t. We agreed to wait until this is all over.”
With a smile, Veronica touches his arm and says, “You should know better than anyone how little time we have to live out our dreams.” With a thank you, Shiro calls after his friend.
Most of the episode is spent on Allura with the other three paladins, having fun with them, to highlight that she is having a good time. Lance trying to win a blue lion plush for her stays, but using a different game (one allura wouldn’t destroy at); and the scene with pidge and colleen stays as well. Allura and Hunk both eye the test of strength, hunk because there’s a HUGE yellow lion. He tries once and doesn’t get it; so allura offers to try, “You really think you’re up for it little lady?” mocks the carnival worker. “I suppose we won’t know until i’ve tried.” Pretending she can’t do it, “oh my, this hammer is quite heavy,” she then proceeds to whack the hell out of it, sending the bell on top right into the sky. They then walk away with hunk blushing and holding his new, massive yellow lion.
Through out the episode, there are cuts to Coran, who is still doing the Yalmor calling competition, but it’s reframed to have the same level of intensity and shadiness as the armwrestling tournament and ultimately replaces that storyline.
The scene cuts to Keith and Shiro playing darts, Keith looking intense as he’s about to throw the dart. He does, nailing a balloon that’s revealed to have one point; keith hollars in defeat and turns to shiro:” “best four out of seven!” Shiro laughs, saying they should play a different game instead.
Shiro comments that he hasn’t seen Keith relax like this in a long time, who answers in kind. “Things have been hard. We haven’t exactly had a break in over a year.” Keith pauses, thinking, before he turns with a smile to Shiro. “But you’re right. Today’s been a lot of fun. I’m glad we hung out, Shiro.” They turn to each other, smiling. Shiro’s arm reaches out, but he’s interrupted by a loud wailing that startles the both of them. “Coran?”
The penultimate scene is Coran winning the yalmor contest, receiving the cheers and celebration of the paladins (AS HE DESERVES). As the excitement dies down, Allura turns her head to the sky and pauses. Shiro, separating himself from the excitement, asks Allura if something is wrong. “...There’s something I’m worried about.”
Shiro and Allura return to the Atlas where they find the dark entity has escaped from its chamber. It breaks free from the holding room and dives toward shiro, but not reaching him before allura jumps in the way, quintessence bursting from her and she suddenly absorbs the dark entity. Shiro catches her
Additions:
because i’m reformatting the energy of why allura takes on the dark entity, the mood around it is being shuffled around entirely. Allura constanting having to defend her bad decision is perhaps one of the worst offenders of allura’s personality as the season progresses from this point, and so changing the mood in which she takes on the dark entity should fix that.